Discuss about a bag you want to own. where you want to buy it, how much it will cost you and why you want this kind of bag?

Nowadays, there are plenty of bags available in the market like shoulder bags, messenger bag etc. If I talk about myself, I think I would like to buy a
bagpack
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backpack
.
Instead
of
bying
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buying
being
it through online sites, I would rather buy it from the shopping mall
nearby
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my vicinity. Since I would buy a branded
bagpack
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backpack
, so it may cost me around 2 to 3,000 rupees.
However
, sometimes various companies give 10-20% discount for boosting their sales, so if I wait till the offer, it might cost me around 1600 rupees. I prefer
this
kind of bag
beacuse
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because
they are more comfortable and practical in day to day use. I commute to different places by scooty so
backpack
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my backpack
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is easy to carry on it.
Moreover
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it distributes the burden equally on the shoulders and back, so one can carry it for long hours.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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