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We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages with it, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays,
internet
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 is indispensable in the life of every human being. It is important to consider whether the merits of
this
 invention are overshadowed by its demerits or not. Some
people
 argue that
technology
 creates
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 of hurdles
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 are unnoticed. But, I disagree with
this
 perspective. According to my opinion, the development of high- tech is crackerjack because it provides us
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 kind of facilities in every field.
To begin
 with,
internet
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 play
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 role in time- saving. Due to modernization, everyone is busy
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 their hectic schedule.
However
, in ancient time,
people
 had to do everything with their hands and they did not get time for themselves. But in today's world, we have multitudinous gadgets available at our home as well as
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 which saves
our
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 huge time that can be invested
on
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 ourselves.
For instance
, earlier, individuals spent hours on cleaning but now, we can do it in
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 minutes with the aid of
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.
This
 is
also
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 of
technology
.
Furthermore
,
this
 innovation helps us to connect with our loved ones easily. If we see our past,
people
 usually sent letters to each other which reached in many days but in present, we can send e-mails, messages in just by pressing one button and our family can receive it in few minutes. That's only possible with the growth of
technology
. Add to it, video calls and phone calls
also
 make us close to our family. In
this
 way, we can see and talk with each other. To conclude, many
people
 may vary in their point of view because
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 they think that
technology
 reduces face to face interaction plus our information is not secure on
internet
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 but they forget the abundance of advantages of
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. I think,
technology
 is very crucial in our life and
it's
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 pros are undeniable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connectivity
  • digital banking
  • cybersecurity
  • data protection
  • security breaches
  • cyber attacks
  • online transactions
  • digital divide
  • surveillance
  • freedom of information
  • responsible usage
  • ethical considerations
  • digital footprints
  • online behavior
  • information inequality
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