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Online shopping is significantly increasing what effect does this have people, what are the demerits and what are the job opportunities?

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Online shopping is the growing trend of the contemporary world. It’s difficult to go to the market for shopping as compared to online shopping. It is gaining popularity in the modern population.
This
 essay would explore both the benefits and drawbacks of online shopping and
also
 mention the employment opportunities it offers. Undoubtedly, there are significant benefits that online shopping brings to us. The
first
 benefit is that it is time-saving and offers a number of options in just one click. We don’t need to visit various shops in search of the right
product
moreover
 we can go through a variety of options,as much as we want.
Secondly
, it became a wide market in which goods are sold at cheap and affordable prices. For ,instant growing competition in the e-commerce
business
 has led to huge discounts for customers.
Nevertheless
, online shopping has a downside as well. Cases of fraud with buyers have taken place namely lower quality
product
 is delivered that differ from the
product
 promised.
Furthermore
, it has
also
 affected the retail
business
 and many of them have shut down as the result many workers, retailers, sales agents lost their jobs. On the bright side, e-commerce
business
 has open doors to various job opportunities. IT sector employees design online shopping websites.
In addition
 to it, a number of customer service agents, distributors, deliverymen are appointed for the smooth running of online
business
. In the contribution, online shopping has made life easier. Now people can choose the right
product
 from a wide range of varieties, sitting at home. It
also
 generated numerous jobs that help to resolve the problem of unemployment in the nation.
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