Some people consider thinking about and planning for the future to be a waste of time. They argue that people should simply live in the moment. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people tend to believe that they should think about their
future
and make plans to achieve
the
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future
goals. Even young people are the ones who try to think about
future
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rather than focus on their lives now. It
is disagreed
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that people should simply live in the moment. Analysing
unpredictability
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of
future
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which requires making plans for the
future
's lives and the limitation in living in the moment simply without having a clear image of their
future
will support
this
claim.
Firstly
, nobody knows what may happen in the
future
, which will make them realise
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importance of thinking about their
future
.
For example
, they need to save money for the
future
so that they can deal with whatever happens in the
future
.
Unfortunatly
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Unfortunately
, in many
countries
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we need to use
money
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to survive and achieve their
future
deam
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dream
dreams
. If they spend time without thinking about
future
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the future
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, they may become poor.
This
may
disscourage
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discourage
them from pursuing their dream.
However
,
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sad
sinario
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scenario
could be prevented if they save money for the
future
even though it sacrifices current lives and even they feel bored.
Therefore
, it
imakes
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makes
clear that panning for the
future
should be important and not wasting time.
Secondly
, in
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broader
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broade
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context, it is important to keep in mind that we live in
meritocratic
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society. We
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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