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Smacking children is the best way to discipline children. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

#children #discipline
Some people believe that corporal
punishment
 is a good
way
 to teach
the
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children
. A number of
parents
 preferred physical
punishment
 to
instill
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discipline
to
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in
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children
 so that they will grow to be good and
God fearing
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 persons.
This
 essay will argue why physical
punishment
 is entirely not the best
way
 to
discipline
the
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apply
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children
. Nowadays,
parents
 believe that inflicting physical pain is the best
way
 to
discipline
 their
children
 to correct their
behaviors
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behaviours
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 because
children
 are at their formative years and it’s the best time to teach them that there are consequences if they do wrong.
Furthermore
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this
 will
also
 serve as
deterrent
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a deterrent
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 for them not to go against the rules. Indeed,
children
 with military
parents
 are likely to grow with stricter upbringing because of their influences though other
parents
 w/o
this
 background
also
 do
this
 kind of raising their young ones because they believed that smacking them is a good
way
 to
discipline
 them. One example is when
parents
 tap the back of the hands of their
children
 when they misbehave or if they are being rude. Overall, some
parents
 believe that
by
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punishing them physically is an effective
way
in
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of
to
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molding
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moulding
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 the
behaviors
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behaviours
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 of their
children
 to become better persons as they grow.
In contrast
, some
parents
 preferred
non physical
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non-physical
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punishment
 as the best
way
 of disciplining
the
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their
children
 because they believed that talking to them firmly and setting rules and regulations in the family is a better
way
 of with them and .
Children
 who are raised in
non-violent
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 environment bla..... In conclusion,
this
 essay argued why smacking is entirely not
appropriate
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an appropriate
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way
 of disciplining
the
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children
 because of the bad repercussions. In my opinion, Inflicting corporal
punishment
 is definitely not the best
way
 to
instill
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instil
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discipline
to
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in
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children
.
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