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In many parts of the world, water sources are becoming more polluted. discuss the problems and the solutions

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Water
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sources
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 are been contaminated all over the world at
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 alarming rate. Industrialisation and common human ignorance have been one of the major contributors
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 dilemma which is creating
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 of issues for the existence of mankind. Marine life
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 and natural drinking
water
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sources
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 are at the receiving end because of these implications.
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toxic
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 which is been sent directly to the sea have destroyed
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 and natural food
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 for fish and other species.
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 has resulted in
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 harvest of fish, for fisherman due to the minimum growth of fish in the sea.
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, uncontrollable domestic sewage in cities
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 polluted the rivers extensively resulting
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to buy
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water
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 for drinking purposes. As an example,
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 city recorded an
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 low percentage of drinking
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avalability
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availability
 in the
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 year.
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, it is evident that the damage
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cause
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caused
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 by these incidents
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 a drastic impact
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 the future generation. Solutions can be derived from both the citizens and the government for
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 social issue.
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 with, governments must take
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stern
 actions and policy reforms to punish large scale factories for dumping toxic waste
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water
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sources
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.
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, the current irrigation
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systems
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 must be properly maintained to preserve
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water
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 at any cost.
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, the young generation must be taught the importance and the
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scarcity
 of the
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 resource, so that they will create a
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mind shift
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 to embrace the cultural change needed to save
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 for
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. In conclusion, all humans must understand the gravity of the impact which is done as of now is immense ,and day by day everyone is
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 a resource which cannot be replaced easily and work must work hard towards saving the
water
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 resource for generations to come.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrialization
  • untreated waste
  • agricultural runoff
  • pesticides
  • fertilizers
  • pharmaceuticals
  • microplastics
  • marine life
  • stricter regulations
  • sustainable agricultural practices
  • wastewater treatment facilities
  • public awareness campaigns
  • advanced technologies
  • pollutants
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