In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years people are suffering from
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enormous
health issues than
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past.
This
is because of their own eating habits, busy work schedule, stress etc., But when it comes to
food
, it's
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majorly
because of fast
food
they are consuming to save time from their breakfast or lunch breaks.
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essay will focus on the necessity of the Government to start applying the high
taxes
on
such
foods or they should opt for another solution. Start applying the
taxes
on fast
food
like Pizza, Burgers etc., at some point, it is absolutely right but some are not really favouring
to
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it.
For example
. there are various students who are away from their home and they have no option to cook,
burden
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of studies may initiate them to go for Pizza or Burger which is relatively cheap and easy to eat which saves time, money both.
Also
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it serves the purpose to
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their hunger.
This
happens with working professionals
also
. In
such
cases, the local body has to decide its
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consequences
on students or working professionals, it might affect their planned monthly expenditure. Looking at
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another
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part, people are becoming lazy now a day. They
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don't
want to cook at home. When
this
is the situation with adults
then
obviously children are following them. Our children
moreover
demands
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for
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money
instead
of taking a
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food
. It is
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their
colleuges
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colleagues
colleges
, their peers are buying and to be in the group, they
also
start
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the same habits. But
instead
of applying charges on
this
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food
, the Government should think about starting some meal facility
to
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all students in the school which will serve them
the
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nutritious
food
and it will help to change their
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eating habits. In my opinion, we should find out the proper solution which will overcome the health issues. Applying just
taxes
is not going to help
the
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society. And
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that's
why I
dont
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don't
agree with the decision to apply
taxes
on the
fastfood
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fast food
.
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