Traffic is a problem everywhere in the world. It creates congestion, and noise. In response to this problem, some cities charge an expensive tax to cars in downtown areas. Do you agree with this tax?

Traffic congestion and noise pollution have become a global

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therefore

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, in response to

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issue, the government has increased the

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on vehicles

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an aim to address the

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. I strongly disagree with

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point of view as I believe that these concerns can be resolved differently without making unnecessary demands of the public.

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, globalization has negatively created issues like overpopulation.

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, traffic congestion and noise pollution are the by-

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products

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problem

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. As

people

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are constantly migrating from one place to another due to diverse reasons like; better amenities, employments and healthcare purposes.

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,

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the taxing

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of

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apply

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private car owners heavily

have

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some negative sides

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the individual and

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society.

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, many

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live in

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which

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are not covered by public transportation,

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as those who lived in rural

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or

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the countryside

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. Should there be any public buses or trains that pass through

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areas

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, the schedule might be only once or twice

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a day. These

people

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need private cars and if the

tax

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for motorised vehicles is raised significantly

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it would be a big burden and

problem

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for them. 

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, it is a fact that

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industries have absorbed so many employments. As the demand for motor vehicle decreases due to the high

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rate, many automobile companies would reduce their employment number. As a consequence, the country's unemployment rate would be high. In conclusion, the solution of charging private car owner with

high

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vehicle

tax

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rate to reduce traffic problems has significant drawbacks. In my opinion,

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of the solution are that

people

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could travel faster and air pollution would be reduced.

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, the disadvantages of it are that it would become a big

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for those who lived in remote

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since public transports are rarely reaching them and

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cause unemployment issue.