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Each country has its own charity organizations. Sometimes people think that those organizations should only offer help to their own country while others thinks they are supposed to give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Charity organizations are vital for all world,they could aid
people
 when disaster come by, save
people
's lives and provide shelter for citizens.
However
, these
charities
 usually belong to one specific
country
, sometimes some large
charities
 consider helping their domestics citizens in priorities. In
this
 article, I will discuss why I agree the
charities
 should give aid to
people
 worldwide.
Firstly
, the goal of
charities
 is to save the lives of
people
.The member of charity always have trained by specialists who have more professional knowledge background than normal individuals,
therefore
, these members could cure more
people
 by using their aid backgrounds. To specify, these
charities
 are able to help more
people
 in emergency situations without national boundaries.
Secondly
,developed countries usually have more advanced types of equipment for multiple purposes.
For instance
, one developed
country
 may have a drone to search for
people
 who cannot be contacted in an earthquake, comparing with
this
 situation, one developing
country
 may not own
this
 device to explore sick
people
 or vanished
people
.
Furthermore
,these newest types of equipment definitely could help more in searching or helping. If these organizations intend to provide more abilities to the sick base on who should be treated
firstly
, these situations of treatment may be improved. To conclude, charitable institutions are a necessary role in modern society,
however
, how to help more
people
 is the ultimate purpose for these institutions or even for all human beings.Without the priority of their own
country
, more
charities
 may help more
people
 in multiple situations.
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