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The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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Global
population
 rising is often viewed as being caused by the improvement in
level
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 of living. The essay agrees that the growth of the
population
 is the biggest problem for
the
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people nowadays.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will describe how the development of technologies led to
this
 soar and
then
 talk about
such
 side effects of the growing as
surge
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a surge
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 in garbage production and a lack of
food
.
First
, technologies play an important role in the development of our society. High technological medical service discovers diseases at early phases, while the variety of medicines completely cures even severe illnesses.
Furthermore
, medicine now allows women to born
children
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 up to 40 years old. Science development and high standards in the
food
 sector made
deep water
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deepwater
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 cleaning and highly nutritious
food
 available for
purchasing
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 in big amount by large families without extra expenses. Elongated lives and having more children lead to
the
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 increase in
population
.
Second
, the more people we have, the more
food
 is required.
However
, even with developed technologies in agriculture and
food
 processing,
the
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people can not produce as much
food
 as they consume. Because all fertile soils together are not capable to provide
sufficient
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 amount of
food
 for everybody.
Moreover
, garbage is an integral part of any human activity not only
food
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the food
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 production industry. Based on BBC forecasts, by 2050 the weight of waste in the global ocean will exceed the weight of all water
habitants
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habitats
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 together. To sum up, the rise of
population
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the population
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 on Earth which was caused by the improvements in
level
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the level
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 of living became
the
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 giant problem for the humans.
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