Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children.) Do you agree or disagree?
Many believe that high school
students
should do unpaid community
work
as part of the education program such
as helping kindergarden
teachers Correct your spelling
kindergarten
to
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in
from
looking
after children, developing their neighbourhood and Change the verb form
look
community
. To my way of thinking, it is a good oportunitie
to improve their personality.
I believe that high school Correct your spelling
opportunity
students
can have a valueable
Correct your spelling
valuable
experience
from unpaid sochial
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social
work
. They can increase their real life
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real-life
experience
which is extreamely
important in their age. Correct your spelling
extremely
For
example
my sister needed to do 60 hours Add a comma
,example
unpaid
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of unpaid
work
for the community
because it was mandatory for her. Even though she did not wanted
to go, she loved it. She was lucky enough to Change the verb form
want
chose
. She loves kids so she decided to Change the verb
choose
work
in a local kindergarden
. Correct your spelling
kindergarten
This
experience
inspired her to became a special needs teacher.
At the same time
the Add a comma
,time
community
has a benefit from it such
as ealdery
people or people with disability. Correct your spelling
elderly
Students
can give a hand around the house for example
cleaning the gutter or even cocking some food together. These activities help elderly people to forget that
fact they are alone and Correct determiner usage
the
also
a big help to get these thing done around the house what they are would not been
able to complete be Change the verb form
be
themselfs
. Correct your spelling
themselves
Moreover
social work
improving our community
.
In conclusion, If I am the decision maker
I would make it mandatory for high school Add a hyphen
decision-maker
students
to do unpaid community
work
because it is a
ordinary chance for Change the article
an
yungsters
to get Correct your spelling
youngsters
real life
Add a hyphen
real-life
experience
which makes their life easier in the future and also
these program
create a better Change the determiner
programs
community
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite