Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children.) Do you agree or disagree?

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Many believe that high school
students
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should do unpaid
community
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work
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as part of the education program
such
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as helping
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kindergarten
teachers
to
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in
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looking
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after children, developing their neighbourhood and
community
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. To my way of thinking, it is a good
oportunitie
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opportunity
to improve their personality. I believe that high school
students
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can have a
valueable
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valuable
experience
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from unpaid
sochial
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social
work
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. They can increase their
real life
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experience
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which is
extreamely
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extremely
important in their age.
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example
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my sister needed to do 60 hours
unpaid
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of unpaid
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work
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for the
community
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because it was mandatory for her. Even though she did not
wanted
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to go, she loved it. She was lucky enough to
chose
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. She loves kids so she decided to
work
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in a local
kindergarden
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kindergarten
.
This
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experience
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inspired her to became a special needs teacher. At the same
time
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the
community
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has a benefit from it
such
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as
ealdery
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elderly
people or people with disability.
Students
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can give a hand around the house
for example
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cleaning the gutter or even cocking some food together. These activities help elderly people to forget
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fact they are alone and
also
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a big help to get these thing done around the house what they are would not
been
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able to complete be
themselfs
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themselves
.
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social
work
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improving our
community
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. In conclusion, If I am the
decision maker
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I would make it mandatory for high school
students
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to do unpaid
community
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work
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because it is
a
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ordinary chance for
yungsters
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youngsters
to get
real life
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real-life
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experience
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which makes their life easier in the future and
also
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these
program
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programs
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create a better
community
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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