Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children.) Do you agree or disagree?

Many believe that high school
students
should do unpaid
community
work
as part of the education program
such
as helping
kindergarden
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kindergarten
teachers
to
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in
from
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looking
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after children, developing their neighbourhood and
community
. To my way of thinking, it is a good
oportunitie
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opportunity
to improve their personality. I believe that high school
students
can have a
valueable
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valuable
experience
from unpaid
sochial
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social
work
. They can increase their
real life
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experience
which is
extreamely
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extremely
important in their age.
For
example
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my sister needed to do 60 hours
unpaid
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of unpaid
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work
for the
community
because it was mandatory for her. Even though she did not
wanted
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want
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to go, she loved it. She was lucky enough to
chose
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choose
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. She loves kids so she decided to
work
in a local
kindergarden
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kindergarten
.
This
experience
inspired her to became a special needs teacher. At the same
time
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the
community
has a benefit from it
such
as
ealdery
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elderly
people or people with disability.
Students
can give a hand around the house
for example
cleaning the gutter or even cocking some food together. These activities help elderly people to forget
that
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fact they are alone and
also
a big help to get these thing done around the house what they are would not
been
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able to complete be
themselfs
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themselves
.
Moreover
social
work
improving our
community
. In conclusion, If I am the
decision maker
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I would make it mandatory for high school
students
to do unpaid
community
work
because it is
a
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ordinary chance for
yungsters
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youngsters
to get
real life
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real-life
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experience
which makes their life easier in the future and
also
these
program
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programs
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create a better
community
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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