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A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives. Do you agree that living in computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.

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According to consensus in modern genetics anatomically modern humans
first
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 arrived on the Indian subcontinent from Africa between 73,000 and 55,000
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 ago.
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, the earliest known human remains in South
Asia
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 date to 30,000
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 ago. Settled
life
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, which involves the transition from foraging to farming and pastoralism, began in South
Asia
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 around 7,000
BCE
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. At the site of Mehrgarh, Balochistan,
Pakistan
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, presence can be documented of the domestication of wheat and barley, rapidly followed by that of goats, sheep, and cattle.[2] By 4,500
BCE
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, settled
life
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 had spread more widely,and began to gradually evolve into the Indus Valley
Civilization
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, an early
civilization
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 of the Old World, which was contemporaneous with Ancient Egypt and Mesopotamia.
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 civilisation flourished between 2,500
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 and 1900
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 in what today is
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 and north-western India
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 and was noted for its urban planning, baked brick houses, elaborate drainage, and water supply. According to consensus in modern genetics anatomically modern humans
first
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 arrived on the Indian subcontinent from Africa between 73,000 and 55,000
years
Use synonyms
 ago.
However
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, the earliest known human remains in South
Asia
Use synonyms
 date to 30,000
years
Use synonyms
 ago. Settled
life
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, which involves the transition from foraging to farming and pastoralism, began in South
Asia
Use synonyms
 around 7,000
BCE
Use synonyms
. At the site of Mehrgarh, Balochistan,
Pakistan
Use synonyms
, presence can be documented of the domestication of wheat and barley, rapidly followed by that of goats, sheep, and cattle.[2] By 4,500
BCE
Use synonyms
, settled
life
Use synonyms
 had spread more widely,and began to gradually evolve into the Indus Valley
Civilization
Use synonyms
, an early
civilization
Use synonyms
 of the Old World, which was contemporaneous with Ancient Egypt and Mesopotamia.
This
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 civilisation flourished between 2,500
BCE
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 and 1900
BCE
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 in what today is
Pakistan
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 and north-western India
,
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apply
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 and was noted for its urban planning, baked brick houses, elaborate drainage, and water supply. According to consensus in modern genetics anatomically modern humans
first
Linking Words
 arrived on the Indian subcontinent from Africa between 73,000 and 55,000
years
Use synonyms
 ago.
However
Linking Words
, the earliest known human remains in South
Asia
Use synonyms
 date to 30,000
years
Use synonyms
 ago. Settled
life
Use synonyms
, which involves the transition from foraging to farming and pastoralism, began in South
Asia
Use synonyms
 around 7,000
BCE
Use synonyms
. At the site of Mehrgarh, Balochistan,
Pakistan
Use synonyms
, presence can be documented of the domestication of wheat and barley, rapidly followed by that of goats, sheep, and cattle.[2] By 4,500
BCE
Use synonyms
, settled
life
Use synonyms
 had spread more widely,and began to gradually evolve into the Indus Valley
Civilization
Use synonyms
, an early
civilization
Use synonyms
 of the Old World, which was contemporaneous with Ancient Egypt and Mesopotamia.
This
Linking Words
 civilisation flourished between 2,500
BCE
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 and 1900
BCE
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 in what today is
Pakistan
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 and north-western India
,
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apply
show examples
 and was noted for its urban planning, baked brick houses, elaborate drainage, and water supply.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependent on technology
  • digital platforms
  • instant communication
  • automation
  • advanced software solutions
  • access to information
  • educational resources
  • screen time
  • health issues
  • eye strain
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • privacy concerns
  • cybersecurity threats
  • identity theft
  • data breaches
  • overreliance
  • face-to-face social interactions
  • social skills
  • isolation
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