You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Media

is as powerful as it can make any individual reach on top of the world in a minute, on the

otherhand

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other hand

if they decide to pull

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somebody from its top level and throw

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them on

him on

her on

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the road, it can happen. I will not say

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the

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media

is honest or wrong but I would like to express my views on

Media

and how they treat

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famous people, capture their privacy and try to interfere in their

life

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lives

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. Some days back there was an incident I read in the newspaper

that

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where

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a group of newspaper Journalists tried to meet our Local leader

Rama

Naidu

in Pottichelli where he was actually going for his personal vacation with his family,

still

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welcomed

journalist

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the journalist

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, arranged a dinner for them, gave them the VIP service and at one point of discussion, these journalists lost their control and they attacked

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our Leader. As luck was with

Naidu

, his bodyguards protected and saved him from

this

attack.

This

incident was really shameful as

Naidu

has successfully driven various developmental projects in our area

as well

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and

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he is the main founder of the Radha Krishna

foundation

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group which is especially for orphan children and their education.

This

is a really unfair action of the

media

. In my opinion, our leaders

also

have their own

life

and they have a right to live their

life

as they want. They should be given the same privacy which we look for

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as a normal person. Another point is

Naidu

became a leader through his hard work. He is popular amongst the public

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because of

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his helping nature. We should see his work done for the betterment of society

than

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rather than

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putting

the

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mud on his shirt. Whatever fame he has earned , does he need to pay the price for that fame by disturbing

into

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his

life

? He did not choose

this

life

on his own, he did it for us. So why are we disturbing his private

life

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we have no right to do

this

. In my

opinion

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opinion,

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every person though a famous or a normal person has

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the

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right to live his personal

life

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the way he wants.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

367 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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in many countries today, if people want to find a job , they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Other say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to edcuate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

Please elaborate on your current physical and mental health, including any dental or oral treatment, medical interventions, and mental health therapy or counseling.