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Economic progress is one way to measure the success of a country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think any one is more important than the others?

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We are all used to the terms “developed” and “developing” when describing a
country
’s progress. While these are useful words, they do not entirely capture all of the factors that measure how a
country
 grows and changes. While economic indicators are important, we should
also
 look at non-material progress for a complete picture. One of the most important factors outside of economics is how people treat each other. If a
country
’s citizens are friendly and warm and kind to one another,
then
 it says something positive about their character.
This
 is
also
 connected to education. The
caliber
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 of people that a
country
 produces is almost certainly related to its education system. Another important indicator is
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 programmes and services.
For example
, if a
country
 has good health care and social services,
then
 it is fair to say that that
country
 has a high set of values and conscience. If a person loses a job but can get assistance, or a minority still has an equal opportunity
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 success,
then
 we can say
this
country
 is advanced. A final thing to look at is how that
country
 is perceived by other nations. If it is a peaceful
country
 and treats others fairly, it will
also
 be respected and
this
 is a sign of success and vice versa. While it is hard to say which of these factors is most important, we can draw a conclusion that it has to do with “values”. So, to conclude, a
country
 must have high principles if it wishes to be truly considered successful. Of course, economics is still an important benchmark, but it is not the only one. Surely, what makes a
country
 great is not its GDP or modern buildings, but how civilized it is.
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