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Some people believe that success in life depends upon hard work and determination while, others think that money and personal appearances are important. Discuss both views and give opinion.

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Nowadays, it is not easy to get success in our
life
. Many masses argue that great efforts plus highly motivation
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 indispensable to get achievements in
life
. Whereas, some consider that wealth and good look matter the most in
this
 case.
This
 essay will discuss both views. In my opinion, hard
work
 is a weapon to win
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the fight
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 of
life
. Our endeavour and single mind on
work
 pay most in our way of success.
First
 of all, numerous exams just passed by a few students and multitudinous job-postings just want good marks plus intelligence which are not possible to purchase with any sort of power. Even though, with the power of notes or our beauty.
For instance
, Mahatma Gandhi put
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in
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 the battle
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 freedom.
Although
, he is not from
rich
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 family. But still, Indians called him, 'the father of the nation'.
On the other hand
, few folks opine that good personality inclined our confidence which is imperative to improve our status in society. People can start their career in
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modeling
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 and in acting with
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 personal appearance As well as, we cannot begin our business without money. So, our bank account is demanded to become
businessman
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.
For example
, some interviewers just impressed by
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 -dressed plus confident person. To conclude, every aspect has
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 own value. If we are from
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 family plus we have good looks.
Then
, it would be blessings.but, we can't neglect hard
work
 and passion to do something in
life
. Because
,
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 it's rightly said that hard
work
 is a key
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 success.
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