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Government should spend money on railway rather than roads? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #railway #roads
Goverment
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Government
 expenditure is an issue of concern in many countries. It is even wiser for
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goverment
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government
 to decide on the best mode of
trasport
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transport
 to spend money on. It is agreed that governments should spend money on
railway
 rather than roads. The main two reasons being that , trains reduce
conjestion
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congestion
 and because of their great speed.
Firstly
, a train has
a
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 capacity to carry a
number
 of
people
 in a go.
For example
, when
people
 are going to work in the
city
 , where I come from , they will go by train
instead
 of public transport.
This
 will
therefore
 limit the
number
 of vehicles heading to the
city
thus
 reducing traffic jam
on
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 rush hours. It is better to
priotise
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prioritise
railway
 as
this
 will combat the issue of traffic jam which is so rampant in many cities nowadays.
Secondly
,
railway
 transport can cover long distances
is
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 a short time because of high speed.
This
 means
people
 can travel from the outskirts of big cities to the
city
everyday
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 without any problems.
For instance
 , individuals can opt to live outside London and travel to work
everyday
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 in the
city
beacuse
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because
 of a reliable and
covienant
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covenant
railway
 system.
In other words
 , housing problems will not be an issue to a
number
 of
people
 as they will reside where ever they choose and
thus
 again tackle overpopulation in major cities.
Therefore
 it is of paramount importance to allocate funds to
railway
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 system as it is so effective in solving housing problems. In conclusion, in the contemporary world
transport
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 system plays a great role in our day to day lives. It is crucial to spend money on
railway
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 as
this
 will address a
number
 of issues being faced
everyday
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. After
all
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 has been said, effective
railway
ssytem
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system
 enables a brighter future with no busy, tiresome rush hours and an option to live outside the
city
 while
traveling
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travelling
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 to the
city
everyday
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 without any hustles.
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