People's shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to a recent survey done by Daily Mail Magazine, the way people buy things correlates with their age than any other element. Some may disagree with
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that older-adults and middle-aged tend to shop more compared to young-adults,
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in responsibilities and income.
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found that 87%
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and women (30-60 years old) have a rise in
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of purchases in comparison to 16-29 years old individuals. Based on
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • digital natives
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar stores
  • target demographic
  • disposable income
  • consumer behavior
  • market segmentation
  • purchasing power
  • retail therapy
  • brand loyalty
  • impulse buying
  • price-sensitive
  • cross-generational
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