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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
The development of online retailers might replace ordinary shopping. From my point of view, that situation will definitely happen in near future. I am going to tell you about new technologies in
this
 essay which provides that and discuss how exactly those can influence it.
First
 of all, people spend a lot of time on the Internet,
furthermore
, the IT industrial provides new web platforms and sites in order to keep their attention.
Besides
, huge retailers notice it and try to increase there part of online treading. For instants, Walmart increases online retail by over 40% in the
last
 year due to improving its online platform and delivering.
On the other
hand
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 when going to a shop people may not be able to explore as many designs and brands as they can in online shopping in
short
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 time. People can order products to be delivered to their home
instead
 of having to drive to different
shops
 which can often be
time consuming
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. Many online retail sites take returns of products if they are found to be faulty or if the customer is not satisfied with the quality of the product.
Although
 few giant retail
shops
 offer
such
 services many smaller retail
shops
 do not take returns of products ones they are sold.
This
 limitation will make those
shops
 less favourable for the customers.
Second
 of all, many companies decrease the product price in online
shops
. Eventually,
this
 relates to reusing software technology and fairing the employees during closing offline magazines.
For example
,
such
 as companies as Macy's develops their deliver and takes the rest of many employes. In conclusion,
such
 a trend gives me realize that being online
shops
 in near feature is not just sound. It has already started and it will grow up more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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