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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of
economic
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 , so many things are being changed in our daily life.
For example
, traditional
foods
 are disappearing day by day.
However
, it replaced by international fast
foods
,
such
 as hamburger ,chips and pizza. It demonstrated a negative effect
for
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 both families and societies. I can't agree more .
Firstly
, on the one hand , traditional
cuisine
 stands for the fashion of the
country
.
However
, there are different types of
cuisine
 from different places specific in
China
.
For example
 ,the people from the southwest of
China
, they are like to eat spicy
cuisine
 fiercely. So, hotpot is their city food and is
also
 very famous in
China
. When people mention the hotpot, everyone will know it comes from the southwest city ,
such
 as Chongqing.
Consequently
,
China
 is a provincial with 5000 years
history
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of history
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, which that we have so many traditional
foods
,
for example
, when the winter comes in ,we will eat dumplings and that's a traditional food from south of
China
. It means the family is the most important part
in
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of
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 our rest of life, we have to stay with each other forever.
Therefore
, as you can see, every item
feed
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 behind a fashion of the area. That's all positive way.
Secondly
, on another side , with the develop.ment of technical , we have a close connection with each
country
 from all over the world. If
every one
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 ate bread, hamburger ,french fries and pizza. That's not healthy for people's body.
Moreover
, chips and hamburgers are from
the
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west homey. There is no traditional culture
on
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behind
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itbehind
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 . To sum ,
up
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 everything that has been stated so far, I can't agree more that international
foods
 replace traditional
cuisine
 have a negative effect on
between
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families and societies. Having traditional food can retain the science of the
country
 and educate our children to learn these culture ,it means we protect the art of the
country
 as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • globalization
  • nutrient-rich
  • bonding
  • local cuisine
  • fast food chains
  • convenience
  • processed ingredients
  • sustainability
  • culinary traditions
  • mass-produced
  • environmental degradation
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