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Some expert think that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#expert #children #language #school #outweigh
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Some specialist thinks that it is the right time to start learning a foreign
language
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 in primary
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.
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,
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 policy has been adopted by some
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school’s
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 authorities with both positive and negative outcomes. Generally, learning a foreign
language
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 at primary
school
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 is better than in secondary
school
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 because the children’s
brain
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 have a greater capacity to adopt different subjects at
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 early age.
Furthermore
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, they can capture all the learning steps easily which would be difficult for teenagers. Another reason is that children have fewer courses to read at
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 level,
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that
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 is why
educationalist
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educationalists
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 focus on foreign
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 learning
in
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this
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 stage.
For instance
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,
Japans’
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Japan’s
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 schools, design their course curriculum with the English
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 for
class
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classes
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one
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of one
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 to five students.
On the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages
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 as inefficient
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teacher
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teachers
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.
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, the teacher who is not eligible to demonstrate the lesson interesting and to manage the kids who
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 trouble learning an unknown
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Besides
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due to
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 the lack of budget, authorities might not
able
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 to hire an expert in a foreign
language
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. Another problem,
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the
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 fewer parents think learning a foreign
language
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 is not important at primary
school
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 rather than teaching basic subjects like math, science, etc. So, it is difficult to convince the parents about the necessity of
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foreign
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 because they believe that
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 is a way of waste of time. In conclusion, despite the disadvantages, learning an unknown at the primary
school
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 might be more beneficial for the students rather than the secondary level of
school
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