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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent times, the desire for petroleum and its derivatives have increased worldwide. It has
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 opened the conversation of
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exploring
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 uncharted territories for more
resources
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. I strongly disagree with
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 point of view as I believe that the consequences of climate change
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far reaching
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 and
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 the world already has enough exploited
resources
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 than it needs.
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, climate change has become a huge concern globally. Nation’s are in panic mode because the climate has exhibited certain tendencies that are unusual.
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, some states in the United States of America like Texas
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 recently experienced the snow-storm.
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, people have begun to voice their concerns about these changes. These changes can be attributed to various factors that have begun destroying the ozone layer of
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earth
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 like; exploitation of places in search of crude oil,
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 the process to unearth and separate the products, fossil fuel burning contributes immensely to the destruction of our planet,
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 endangering the lives of the people.
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, in terms of
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, I believe the world already has enough
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 it needs. The government can invest financially
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 scientific researches that are geared towards finding ways to maximise the
resources
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 available and how to convert its by-products for other essential purposes.
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 action would reduce the urge and need
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 exploration of new places for
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.
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, many eco-friendly countries are constantly developing cars that do not need
petroleum like
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 electric cars, computerised cars, steam enabled engines etc. If these options are considered and implemented by the government they can prevent unnecessary harm to our planet. In conclusion, it is true people would always seek to find hidden
resources
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, it is
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 important to protect our planet because if it is destroyed by our ignorance and greed, it would be very tragic. In my opinion, I think that sensitisation to the issues that exploitation can cause is very important .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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