The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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world’s

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continuously and

this

might be the greatest

problem

that humanity going to face at the present time. It is a tendency to believe that the advance technology in

healthcare

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system can lead to

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long life expectancy which may increase the

world’s

population

. According to

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statement, the

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society is the major

problem

that many countries around the world are facing

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as Japan and Norway. It is obvious that people increased longevity and improved health because of the advanced technologies in

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the healthcare

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system.

For example

, the advance disease

such

as cancer is now cured by chemotherapy and radiotherapy or the chronic diseases

such

as diabetes or hypertension can maintain with medication to control the symptoms so that patient can live in well-being life. The mortality rate is less than the fertility rate and

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increase

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world’s

population

nowadays.

In addition

,

this

issue is the greatest

problem

faced by humanity. The more people are living, the more natural resources are using. There are various non-renewable resources

such

as coal and oil which is call fossil fuels. These are the main sources to produce

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energy in

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industrialise companies.

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, the crowded

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population

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is the main

problem

that the cities are expanded and causes deforestation which enormously affected

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animals and natural habitats. In conclusion,

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is a clear indication that

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signal from human-induced environmental issues is now as powerful as the force of nature. I believed that increasing

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the

world’s

population

is the greatest

problem

faced by humanity.

However

, there are many advance technologies that can help us to live friendly to the world and make us living in sustainable ways.