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SOME PEOPLE SAY INTERNATIONAL SPORTS EVENTS HELP WORLD PEACE.DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

#people #sports #events #world #peace
For the past decades, international sports have become our symbol of rivalry and entertainment as well as a friendship connection for oversea
coungtries
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countries
. During performing
activities
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 people around the world get to know each
others
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 and build
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better collaboration between nations.
Hence
 , I strongly unify the opinion of the article as it has been contributing the peaceful statement to every individual.
First
 and foremost, there are countless
advantanges
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advantages
 of carrying out athletics since being active can construct the muscles and strength along with level up the stamina stage as well as boost the immune system standard .
For example
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health research conducted by scientists, a person who is vigorously involving sports gain a higher number of flexibility and endurance compared to the unfit community.
Therefore
, the contributor of regularly exercising is indeed crucial for
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quality of human's living .
On the other hand
 ,
besides
 healthcare issues, competition is one of the
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 for linking people by the
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observance
 of one's union. To illustrate, the setting of battling generate a feeling of amusing
thus
 competitors are willing to
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 in the game notably.
This
 kind of situation has studied by some psychological experts, their result shows that when people are contesting with professional opponents,
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 usually
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 that it is interesting for them in order to explore
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 potential together with their limit's ability.
As a result
, these components
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 upgraded the status of a
passtime
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pastime
pass time
 and entertained
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hence
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 amiable surrounding is created.
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,
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society is presumed to strengthen the association. To conclude, to my way of thinking, aside from achieving a better health
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maintenance
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bonding between
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 population through the fun on the account of spawning a harmonious background.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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