Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drink that has scientifically been proved to have bad effects on people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

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There is no doubt that the selection of

food

intake affects significantly humans health.

Although

it is said by some people that outside unhealthy

food

selling shops should be banned, I believe that doing so will not always have any positive impact on the public's health but will directly affect many businesses

To begin

with

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,with

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it is important to consider that junk

food

restaurants

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are

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the only source of income for many families.

This

is to say that many cafe's

such

as KFC and PIZZA HUT which are the best fast

food

selling outlets are open everwhere in many

countires

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countries

which provides work to the less

quailified

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qualified

population to work in their

food

supply chain.

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Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

115 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
scientifically proven
personal freedom
individual choices
healthcare costs
economic impact
consumer empowerment
outright bans
education campaigns
scientific research
regulated industry
nutritional information
infringe
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Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drink that has scientifically been proved to have bad effects on people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some say that these are the best people to talk to school students about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?