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Professional Nurse’ is my passion always. Truly saying that my mother is my motivator and mentor in
this
 matter. She is a nurse by profession and I heard many stories in regards to a nurse-patient relationship, which always made me either cry or proud to be a nurse. From her stories I learned that nurse can act in many roles as a listener, educator, healer, companion, friend and so on.
Moreover
, the health care system demands teamwork and hard work which I appreciate the most. When I entered the same field, I can feel that emotions that motivate me always to do my best. Every one of my clients is now my energy to move forward, their blessings and prayers are my strong hands to excel in my personal and professional life. I will consider that
this
 opportunity is one of the greatest gifts to excel me and in future, I will be devoting and exploring myself to the world.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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