Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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has made many investments for the benefit of society in so many different sectors,
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, health, education. It
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that
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should only invest in public service.
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is equally important with public service.
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has proven that it can come up with an enormous income.
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organizes a big event
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as a concert
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will help the
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's economy and reputation. While there is no question that public service is important as well,
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well enhance
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culturally.
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, Saudi Arabia has launched a huge event in an old region called Olla. It draws a lot of foreign people's attention.
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are considered as one of the factors that help individuals to take a break from the hard work in life. It is
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dramatically rising in so many sectors.
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present the
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. It is important to maintain it. in conclusion , investing in
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could have enormous rewards for the
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and it is necessary like public services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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