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The obesity rates among teenagers have increased dramatically in many developed countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

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Nowadays,
besides
 the technology advancement, the world has been changing
drammatically
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dramatically
 in term of diet, many
food
 industries have foreseen the benefit of producing fast
food
 in order to gain profits by introducing in an attractive way by its dedicated taste as well as generating a feeling of convenience to enjoy during peak hours. And
this
 has been a domain cause for leading children to be over-weight and a dreadful habit of dining.
Hence
,
this
 article is to indicate the possible reasons together with the solution to the complication.
To begin
 with, since the standard of living has been characterizing gradually
thus
this
 quality has altered the custom of
food
consuming
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.
With the
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 accompany of snacks,sodas and
fast
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food
 restaurants
has
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 contributed a huge impact to the devouring's style.
For example
, those famous junk
food
 outlets like KFC, Mcdonald and Burger King have been drawing
the
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attention to the customer by the method of serving cooking in a swift time and a good appetite. Because of these factors which are the extra-nutrient values,
therefore
 teenagers are presumed to be obese
in
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 their early ages and
this
 outcome can
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results
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them
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in deteriorating the body's image.
On the other hand
, as the frequent rate of working has affected parent's life
rountine
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routine
consequently
 they are not available to prepare a proper a meal for their children and some individuals even encourage the kids to order outside meal which is an unhealthy option and
this
 action could practice an obsession for them.
Howevere
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However
, in
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general
generall
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 there are various methodologies of dealing
such
 as inspiring juvenile to exercise or play sports.
Furthermore
, a statement of negatives about convenient junks can be applied on the account of guiding
community
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 to an awareness. Basically, nourishing children from
an
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 young age can be the best answer for the complication because the pattern of dining is the originator of directing them to the form of diet. To conclude, the flow of obesity among teenagers have dominated in many developed countries by
viture
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virtue
 of junk industries and the lack of monitoring in term of
food
consuming
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.
Also
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 the explanations are accessible for solving the main issue.
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