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Today’s children are living under more pressure from society than children in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion?

#today’s #children #pressure #society
punishing
children
 has become
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popular
 in the current generation to
control
 their behaviour.some teachers think that smacking is the best way to teach them about
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discipline
.
this
 essay will discuss the reasons why smacking
children
 is slightly necessary to teach them some basics in
life
,which are very useful in the future.
parents
 always want their
children
 to be the best person in
the
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society when compared with others.In order to achieve that they use their power to
control
 them whenever they have done something wrong,which have a negative impact on their
life
.because they always care for them.
for example
parents
 may punish their child when he uses some
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respectable
irrespective
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everytime
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.
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 it is a good way to teach them lessons by smacking,note that it can be applicable for bigger mistakes,not for the
slighest
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slightest
 errors.
parents
 always want their
children
 to be the best person in
the
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apply
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society when compared with others.In order to achieve that they use their power to
control
 them whenever they have done something wrong,which have a negative impact on their
life
.because they always care for them.
for example
parents
 may punish their child when he uses some
irrespectable
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respectable
irrespective
 words with elder ones at home or being disrespectable to them
everytime
Replace the word
every time
show examples
.
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of course
ofcourse
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Of ofcourse
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 it is a good way to teach them lessons by smacking,note that it can be applicable for bigger mistakes,not for the
slighest
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slightest
 errors. In conclusion,
this
 essay discussed why smacking
children
 is the best form to
control
 their mental behaviour to teach them some
life
 lessons.
however
,in my opinion,it is not always useful because it may cause
negative
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 impact on you.somethings can be
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laughable
taught able
 just by talking to the child
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quietly
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