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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It is certainly true that developing and finding solutions and measurements for difficult conditions are
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 ways to have great results, while other
people
 tend towards the viewpoint that it is better to
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 with bad
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 like lack of funds and unwanted occupation. In my point of view, I would have to support the idea that
people
 must try very hard to improve harsh situations to have good results. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that human beings should accept sudden conditions. One of
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 reasons can be that being
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grateful
 and thankful for everything either bad or
good will
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 probably result in unpredictable consequences for the future.
This
 means that the individual might learn valuable lessons and several experiences from harsh situations. Another reason could be that taking unbelievable conditions
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 methods with patience can lead to surprises in the other coming events, but in
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 reversed image.
For instance
, facing some health issues like diseases or family's relationship problems in an easy way might provide lots of solutions.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case, it is often argued that in fact, improving the situation is a wise choice.
People
 usually have
this
 opinion because planning
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 may result in unimaginable outcomes. The
second
 reason would be that other paths can lead to the same consequences but
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 different scales.
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 means that improving the case in various modes can be a great advantage to not facing troubles with the situations. A particularly good example here is that a recent study indicated that drawing other possibilities for the same problem will result is the predicted outcomes. In conclusion, while
people
 may vary in their opinions, I believe that solving the condition is one of the best ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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