Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge right and wrong and to behave well. Some say that teachers should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The
last
few decades have seen heated arguments about the responsibility of
teachers
in the classroom.
Although
some people believe that the lectures should interest in the behaviour side as the academic side, other people claim that
teachers
should just focus on the academic part. I stand with the
first
opinion and I believe that merits are more than demerits. On the one hand, the assistant spend more hours with students than their families and education is strongly connected with moral principles, so the students will get their ethics from their
teachers
.
First
, the long life which pupils have spent in their school makes free time for them and
this
is the main required reasons to learn how to recognise with each other and distinguish from black and white.
For instance
, every educational institution has a break time when all learners are connected together, so the
teachers
will provide structure for students to insurance the respects between them.
On the other hand
, other parents think that the study period does not cover all academic materials which must be taken from pupils.
thus
,
teachers
can not lose any time in the lecture for any social purposes or to talk about any behaviours which must be included in every person in
the
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society.
However
, some parents may believe in ideas different from
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