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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge right and wrong and to behave well. Some say that teachers should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 few decades have seen heated arguments about the responsibility of
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 in the classroom.
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 some people believe that the lectures should interest in the behaviour side as the academic side, other people claim that
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 should just focus on the academic part. I stand with the
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 opinion and I believe that merits are more than demerits. On the one hand, the assistant spend more hours with students than their families and education is strongly connected with moral principles, so the students will get their ethics from their
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, the long life which pupils have spent in their school makes free time for them and
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 is the main required reasons to learn how to recognise with each other and distinguish from black and white.
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, every educational institution has a break time when all learners are connected together, so the
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 will provide structure for students to insurance the respects between them.
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, other parents think that the study period does not cover all academic materials which must be taken from pupils.
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 can not lose any time in the lecture for any social purposes or to talk about any behaviours which must be included in every person in
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, some parents may believe in ideas different from
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 beliefs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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