More and more animals are on the verge of extinction, and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this?

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there are many
animals
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in danger of extinction, and more on the
endagered
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endangered
list which has raised a red flag among people.
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I believe that the main reason why
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are slowly
dissapearing
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disappearing
are humans. We are responsible for the climate change that
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lead to sever disbalance
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the ecosystem. The main problem is
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polution
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pollution
and global warming.
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is the desire for
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expansion
into territories
inhabitated
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inhabited
by these
animals
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. The resources to keep these
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alive are limited
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and is because there aren't enough money to create safe
habbitats
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habitats
. In conclusion, I believe we should change our behaviour and start caring for our planet, be more aware that
animals
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are suffering and try our best to educate our children to help the environment.
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