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Many believe that individuals can do little to improve environment. Only government and large companies can make real difference.

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environment
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 is indispensable to live
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a healthy
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life
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. Some
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 argue that the improvement of our surroundings
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 only possible with the contribution of our
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' law, regulations and multi-national
companies
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, not with the aid of common
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.
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 and big corporations have
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 paramount role in the growth of the
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 trash garbage, recycling and many other things.
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,
people
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 are responsible for the polluted
environment
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. They have to try to decline the use of vehicles which they use for commuting. A single person can do something
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this
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 problem.
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 impact on these obstacles. Despite, some benefits of the effort of common
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,
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as well as large
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, as well as large companies,
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companies
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 can do multitudinous things for
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 banned by
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 rules plus
companies
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 can make
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environment friendly
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 products
which
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 will not be harmful.
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, these two campaigns are well- known and they can spread awareness among common
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 industry organized a show in every town of India about the awareness of
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environment
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 issues, masses get lessons about deforestation and greenhouse problems. Some
people
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 unfamiliar with these because of illiteracy. To conclude,
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 essay argued that
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government
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 plus big
companies
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 can do miracles in
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 obstacle. And I
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 with it because it is not
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a game
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 of normal
people
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.

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