The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in our society and how can the problem be solved?

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The quantity of individuals who are overweight has been more common nowadays and
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condition has brought huge healthy issues for them. The overwhelmed routine associated with
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not healthy food certainly contributes to
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reality. One possible solution would be
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people
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be
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more aware of their health and change some habits. The current society has a rushed and busy daily basis routine, in their home, at work and scarcely have time to take care of themselves. In order to overhaul their schedule,
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used to buy food at fast foods restaurants or consuming junk cooking. Even though it could help some
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to improve their routine, the side effects would be felt in one's health. To exemplify, I am a person who lives alone, have no space or skills to cook and
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, I would frequently buy my snack in places like mc
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or
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.
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the food be done rapidly, it is cheap as well. And
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combo sounds perfect for me and those who are in a hurry.
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, that style of
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would not
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forever and when the rhythm of work was about change
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would felt some issues appearing, especially
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problems due to the fact they were not careless in their previous
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, a person who used to work his entire
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and
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retire would definitively enjoy his moments of relaxing and leisure occasion.
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is a
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dream, if the man did not take care of his diet and habits in the past, the moments in the future would be turned into a nightmare.
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, he would pass more time in appointments and hospitals than enjoying
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.
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, on
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solution would
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if the population used to pay attention
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their routine since they were babies.
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associated with the practice of exercising is of pivotal importance for those who desire a better way of
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and
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without concerning about doctors and medicines. In conclusion,
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our society is busier than ever,
people
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could reschedule their tasks and reserve a moment for themselves in order to enjoy more the environment, the company of others and have occasions of peace and relaxing.
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, yoga is a nice option
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beginners who desire to change their
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in order to not become ill in
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upcoming future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • genetics
  • nutritional awareness
  • processed foods
  • fast food
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative measures
  • tax incentives
  • urban planning
  • community gardens
  • wellness initiatives
  • dietary guidelines
  • physical fitness
  • calorie-dense
  • portion control
  • metabolic rate
  • health literacy
  • food deserts
  • work-life balance
  • junk food
  • BMI (Body Mass Index)
  • non-communicable diseases
  • food labeling
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