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The death penalty should be available as a punishment for serious crimes. To what extent do you agree?

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There have been a lot of debates in the past years on the topic of criminal punishments and
one
 of them has been the
death
penalty
.
Although
 there are experts and political leaders who have supported either side of
this
 coin, I strongly agree that
justice
 through the
death
 of the offender is the right decision.
Life
 is the most wonderful present
one
 can get. Taking away
this
 blessing not only ruins the victim's
life
 but the
one
's related to the individual as well. It creates a wound for which any amount of time wouldn't is enough to heal. It can leave families hurt and torn apart but seeing
justice
 being provided can usher hope in them.
This
justice
 can be in the form of the
death
penalty
.
Life
 is the most wonderful present
one
 can get. Taking away
this
 blessing not only ruins the
vicitms
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victims
victim's
victim
life
 but the
one
's related to the
indivual
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individual
 as well. It creates a wound for which any amount of time
would'nt
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wouldn't
be
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is
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 enough to heal. It can leave families hurt and torn apart but seeing
justice
 being provided can usher
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
hope in them.
This
justice
 can be in the form of
death
Add an article
the death
show examples
penalty
.
Life
 is the most wonderful present
one
 can get. Taking away
this
 blessing not only ruins the
vicitms
Correct your spelling
victims
victim's
victim
life
 but the
one
's related to the
indivual
Correct your spelling
individual
 as well. It creates a wound for which any amount of time
would'nt
Correct your spelling
wouldn't
be
Change the verb form
is
show examples
 enough to heal. It can leave families hurt and torn apart but seeing
justice
 being provided can usher
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
hope in them.
This
justice
 can be in the form of
death
Add an article
the death
show examples
penalty
.
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