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Some people feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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We come across
advertisements
, tv commercials, billboards everywhere. There are ongoing discussions about the impact of advertising on
individuals
 and businesses. In my opinion, advertisement as a part of marketing has several positive and some negative
effects
,
however
, the mentioned
effects
 should be discussed. On the one hand,
this
 is a perfect tool for businesses to spread awareness about the service they provide and the product they offer. It plays an important role in the economy.
Besides
 that,
this
 is a big industry where creative minds realize themselves. As an industry
this
 is a good opportunity for
individuals
, artists, creative teams and others, employs many people,
therefore
 providing jobs opportunities and income for many people. The advertisement
also
 has a significant positive effect on
individuals
 as it helps us to compare and make a choice.
On the other hand
,
this
 industry has some negative
effects
 and there should be some regulations to minimize the damage.
Advertisements
 attract people and create false demand. It is getting harder day by day for
individuals
 to understand their needs,
accordingly
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 they consume everything regardless of their needs. The negative impact of
advertisements
 on
individuals
 is an unreasonable consuming habit ühich is growing day-by-day. Some negative
effects
 of advertising
such
 as a loss of budget of the businesses should not be ignored. Some companies spend unnecessarily huge budgets
for
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 advertising. In conclusion,
although
 there are some convincing negative damages of advertisement, the benefits and positive impact outweigh.
However
. In my opinion,
advertisements
 should be regulated to avoid those negatives.
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