Caring For Children is very important for our society. therefore all mothers and fathers should take childcare training course. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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Taking care of
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is believed to have a crucial role in human civilization. It is questionable
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whether all
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need
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such
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a training
course
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to do
childcare
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well.
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I agree with the idea of how significant
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childcare
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is, I completely disagree that training
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should be taken by all parental adults. There is no doubt that the younger generations are inseparable parts of future
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prosperous
and civil society as long as they are well-educated and have
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understanding of morals.
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, it is of great necessity for
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to experience
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good parental guidance.
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, social chaos would be witnessed due to an increase in the number of lawbreakers. It is a fact that people whose backgrounds involve no relation to their parental upbringing would not tend to comply with laws.
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, offenders who did not use to be taught well with ethic lessons and skills helping them apply for a job are likely to commit crimes in order to meet their basic needs and afford their living costs.
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, there is no need for all
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to pursue a training
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in terms of
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, especially in
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society
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in which each
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individual
is frequently packed with
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schedule.
Parents
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, who are responsible for various aspects of life including finance and parental function, are under a lot of pressure; and
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,
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workload with the addition of extra learning seems to be unbearable.
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, with the constant advancement of technologies, there are various sources
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as videos, e-books, social networking sites, providing
parents
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with instructions regarding how to care for
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children
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children
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in the most effective ways. In conclusion, I do not suppose to support the idea that
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childcare
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training
course
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is needed for all
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because as soon as the significance of looking after
children
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is taken into account,
parents
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can join hands to care for their
children
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without having trained by extra courses.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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