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The use of mobile phone in public places is an antisocial as smoking . Smoking is banned in certain places , so mobile phones should be banned in same way . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Society is against to use of cell phones in open places like smoking . Smoking is not allowed
in particular
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 areas , so that mobile ought to be not permitted in the same way . I disagree with
this
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 notion because smoking is injurious to health
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 , the use of a mobile
phone
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 is not .
This
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 essay explains why the use of mobile
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 not banned in public places , followed by a reasoned conclusion .
Firstly
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, the main reason for not banning is that it is as not harmful as smoking .
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 , smoking leads to dangerous health issues like lung cancer because the smoke of cigarettes emits toxic gases which directly travels into the lungs . If someone smokes in public openly , it will affect not only smokers but
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 the person who present
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 , mobile
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 transmit only electromagnetic waves , which is not so much adverse as compared to smoking .
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 , the mobile
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 is more important for employees because most of the work is dependent on them. There are so many significant things present in their mobiles like contacts , email and so on , they have to receive important calls from seniors if they are in public places like shopping mall , market ,etc .
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 to
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 mobile
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 is an integral thing in their life.
However
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 , smoking is as not important as mobiles ,
that is
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 why it should not be banned in public regions. To conclude , I do not agree with
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mobile phones in public areas because it has no side-effects of health problems compared to smoking and it is an important thing for them .
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