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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#future #people #planets #think #money
Recent arguments towards investing
a
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money
 in research on finding new planets like Earth has been increased nowadays. There are various reasons behind
this
 point of view, still spending humongous
money
 on
planet
 search is waste of time and
money
, as per my opinion.
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possible reasons to support
this
 argument. There are many people who are in favour of spending
money
 on analysing a new environment, where normal people can live in future. The main thinking is that the Earth might not be a proper place to leave in future due to
drastical
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drastically
 atmosphere change, Global warming, pollution and other factors which are making our
planet
 a worse place to survive.
On the other hand
, if we think from another direction and start investigating new ways to protect
this
 'Blue
Planet
'
then
 we don't have to think about other areas to get better shelter. The current
ask
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 is to find new sources of energy which will reduce global warming,
for
example
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 Solar energy, Airmill and nuclear power plant. These sources will not only reduce the global warming issue but
also
 will reduce
the
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pollution. The investment of
money
 in better opportunities like modern farming techniques, water purifying plants and recycling of waste will have more value addition in keeping the environment intact. To conclude, it is always a wise decision to maintain our
planet
 and keep the environment hygienic. Saying that spending on the search
of
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 a new
planet
 is not an ideal solution. It is our responsibility to save life on our great globe which we have named
it
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as
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'Earth', the mother of all the planets.
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