In many countries today, people in big cities prefer to live alone or in small family units rather than larger, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

nowadays and increasing numbers of
people
are concerned about
people
started to live alone related issues. Some even claim that the only reunited occasion will be on major Holidays. I support the point of will that
people
should live by small groups or oneself on the one hand, it seems that
people
experience less stress when they live with themselves. They are generally
less
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family members in the small group. It`s easy to come up with a common idea about
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issue to avoid argumentation.
Moreover
, accommodations for one or a couple will be much less expensive,
hence
that mortgage or
other financial burden
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will be undertaken for the one who is paying for it.
Therefore
,
people
who live alone or with fewer family members will receive less
displinary
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disciplinary
as well as criticism that makes them feel more dominate on the
time
energy and life choices they have made like
die
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a choice and relationship affections.
However
, despite the fact that
people
benefited from the upsides when they leave by themselves, some will be felt very lonely from
time
to
time
.
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the other
hand
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big families which are strongly bonded to each other experienced another type of happiness. since there are more
people
in the family
then
there is an intensive sense of solidarity when it comes to deal with the tough opticals.
This
means that they will solve the problems together. As
younger
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generation, you will receive exceeded numbers of suggestions, solutions, choices that
helps
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you overcome the hard
time
when you need it. But again,
people
live
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in families with many members often complain about privacy
last
and some embarrassing situations like sharing of
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bathroom and bear with it. in sum, the most important person is you who will stay around until you vanish,
therefore
I agree to live alone by personal preference. Meanwhile, we should not neglect that families are significant parts
in
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our life .by balance the relationship in between, we hopefully can make sure that we could leave
in
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a peaceful and less stressful lifestyle .
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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