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In some areas of us, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

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In some are of the united states the teenagers can not go out to a particular area at
midnight
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 without supervised by their adults. In my ,opinion
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 is justified because they are too young to keep themself from secure and safe at all
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. Keeping teenagers inside the home during the nights
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 is beneficial for them. If they go out alone at late nights they more likely to come into contact with a criminal.
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, the drug dealers are active in
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time
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 compare to day
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 they modelled the teenagers toward them. They get into the trap of knowing the consequences of their actions. They may start using the drug of curiosity and maybe accented toward it. Sexual are predators
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 active at
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 they target the younger who are alone at
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. If they spend the
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 at home they can be safe from the criminals.
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, there may be an opinion that a curfew should not be imposed. Because it not good to restrict children's freedom and children's actions should be respected
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. I agree with
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 idea to some extent. If a teen is less than 15 years old, they should not be outside after 9'o clock.
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, teens over 15 years old can understand what is wrong.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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