The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Due to the advancement in the medical field and technologies associated with it, people are living a longer life and
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that fact, the world’s population is rising continuously.
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, I totally agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity. The following essay will give a detail explanation of the agreement.
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of causes related to
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continued rise. One of the main reasons behind
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there is an increase in the number of technologies that are used for the diagnosis of diseases.
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, nowadays, many machines related to MRI brains scans have become more advance and ,
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, if a person is suffering from some brain disease , that would be detected easily through
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MRI scans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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