The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

In today's world,
although
everyone knows what impact do cigarettes have on
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health people continue smoking.
Firstly
,
this
essay
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discuss possible reasons for
this
tendency and,
secondly
, it will analyse what can be done to solve the problem.
To begin
with, on the one hand, the main reason
for
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humans
continue
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smoking is that it helps to relax and feel calm.
This
is due to the fact that not only is there much more work and stress around us but
also
it might be extremely hard to quit habits that have been chasing you for a long period of time.
Therefore
, even though the harmful effect of
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is being written everywhere there is still a significant level of consumption.
For instance
, one recent research has
show
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that the sign "Cigarettes are killing you" did not reduce the number of smokers even by a tiny
percent
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.
However
,
this
issue can be solved by implementing a higher tax on producers of products with nicotine.
This
is because of the fact that not only will they be forced to
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increase

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the price of their product to cover new costs but
also
a lot of suppliers might leave the market.
Therefore
, the demand for cigarettes is likely to
decraese
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decrease

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since the price level will be higher.
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, one study has illustrated that
such
fiscal policy has
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in the UK and the number of smokers decreased by 10%. Eventually, to conclude,
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possible cause of humans continue smoking is that in
this
way they are able to relax and separate from the daily problems. Despite
this
fact by government intervention and
implemention
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of high tax on the
supliers
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suppliers

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of product with nicotine the demand can be decreased
considerable
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