It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about culture and people, because people can learn from books, films or the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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Due to the
globlisation
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globalisation
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and the development of
technonlgy
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technology
growing fast . The
airplane
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aeroplane
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,train,
bus
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the bus
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is becoming
more and more stronger
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stronger and stronger
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inch by inch. There are thousands
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countries
counties
countires
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of countires
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and cities in the world. As
human
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a human
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being ,we have to
contuine
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continue
to learn
differnet
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different
cultures from different
people
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.
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, from my perspective ,I disagree with the statement about
travel
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is
unnecessary
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an unnecessary
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schedual
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schedule
in our life.
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and foremost, we have to work very late from 9am-8pm by every weekday.
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, we need to stay with our children or improve our personal skills.
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, we usually live in
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the city
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and less chance
get
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to get
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connect
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with nature park.
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,
travel
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is not only help
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does not only help
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us to reduce
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but
also
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we can meet up
different
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with different
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people
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and learn diversity cultures from
travel
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. When
people
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travel
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all over the world , the
people
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will reflective themself and get know more about themself and they open their horizon and they can get
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experience from
travel
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Conversly
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Conversely
, the book ,
fimls
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films
film
and the internet is only for watching through the screen and paper ,it can't see really word and no one can communicate with you face to face .
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, if we watch all of them
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a
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long time ,it will harmful to our eyes, specific to children. In
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conclusion
,
people
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can learn
culture
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about culture
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through
the
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apply
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books ,film and
internet
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the internet
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, but they can't get
really
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real
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experience .
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,
travel
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is an essential aspect for
people
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. Experience is a vital point for
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everything
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • digital access
  • firsthand experience
  • nuanced understanding
  • cultural subtleties
  • cost-effective learning
  • real-time interaction
  • personal growth
  • sensory engagement
  • global interconnectedness
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