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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The bar chart illustrates the main
exports
 of Southland during the
year
 2000 and in the current
year
. It
also
 gives
the
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future predictions for 2025. Overall, the highest amount of
exports
 will be for international tourism in the
year
 2025 and the
exports
 for the dairy product shows a drastic increment in the
year
 2021.
Additionally
,
lowest
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 amount would be seen for the meat product and
that is
 in the
year
 2025.
To begin
 with, the amount of main
exports
for
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 international tourism is slowly increasing by approximately 1
billion
euros
.
First
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 it was 8
billions
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euros
 in 2000 and
then
 it is going up to around 9
billion
euros
 and the predictions that it will go up to approximately 9.9
billion
euros
 in 2025.
On the other hand
, the main
exports
 for
the
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meat products
is
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 decreasing.
Firstly
, it was 6
billion
euros
 in 2000 and
then
 now it is around 5.5
billion
euros
 and after
that
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 it will go down
up
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to 5
billion
euros
.
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  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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