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These days, people change careers several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, the approach of
switiching
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switching
 jobs frequently has risen in
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alternating
 of
single
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 stable job.
This
 essay provides both the
beneficts
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benefits
 and
drawbracks
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drawbacks
 that
result
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such
approach
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an approach
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. On
positive
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the positive
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 side,
curcial
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crucial
 on
advantage
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the advantage
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 of changing in the career you can follow the passion.
This
,
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 is because
people
 who trend to monotonous job, usually get stuck in the
employement
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employment
unemployment
 they do not want growth.
For instance
, one of my friend who works in
IT
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 sector left his company, and start his own
bussiness
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business
, and now his only person became famous
on
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business
bussiness
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the bussiness
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 sector. If he had not left his profession may not get
this
 reputation. Not only
this
, but better opportunity in is one of
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the major
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 reason. It is very
differently
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 for some
people
 to manage the expense, and a profession switch
help
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 them with
bump
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a bump
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 up to income. On
negative
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the negative
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 side, the most
obivious
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obvious
 of which is lack of mental peace.
Although
 it is quite possible for some
people
 to adjust in the position.
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Furthermore
, change the stream can
sometime
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sometimes
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 prove wrong and it may lead to
downward
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down
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 to their career.
For example
, If
person
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a person
the person
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 is
expercined
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experienced
 in IT
departement
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department
departments
 for 15
year
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years
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 he
want
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 to change his job to photograph it may lead to him into the unstable income. In conclusion, changing the career has advantage and disadvantage but it will
based
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 on the
people
descion
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design
section
.
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