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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter -give details of your study plans -explain why you want to get a part-time job -suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Martin, I hope you
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 the pink of your health. I am glad to apprise you that I am coming to Australia in a couple of months, as I could secure admission to Sydney University. As it is a full-time course, I will have to attain my lectures from morning 09:00 am to 02:00 pm. After all the sessions, I will have to visit college library for two hours to accomplish my assignments. Looking into the aforementioned study plan, I have a lot of spare time till late evening. It is necessary for me to get a job, as my parents have invested a hefty amount for my post graduation course. Considering
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 situation, it becomes inevitable for me to do a part-time job and help my parents. I would be highly obliged if you could help me in getting a job beforehand. As you are in Australia since 5 years, it will be easier for you to find me some references and that definitely includes you. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Regards Nishant Chawda
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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