You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter -give details of your study plans -explain why you want to get a part-time job -suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Martin, I hope you

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the pink of your health. I am glad to apprise you that I am coming to Australia in a couple of months, as I could secure admission to Sydney University. As it is a full-time course, I will have to attain my lectures from morning 09:00 am to 02:00 pm. After all the sessions, I will have to visit college library for two hours to accomplish my assignments. Looking into the aforementioned study plan, I have a lot of spare time till late evening. It is necessary for me to get a job, as my parents have invested a hefty amount for my post graduation course. Considering

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situation, it becomes inevitable for me to do a part-time job and help my parents. I would be highly obliged if you could help me in getting a job beforehand. As you are in Australia since 5 years, it will be easier for you to find me some references and that definitely includes you. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Regards Nishant Chawda

Submitted by Nishant Chawda on Fri Mar 26 2021

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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7 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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