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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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There are individuals who follow the lifestyle
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 a vegan, and they claim that
this
 will
benefitial
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beneficial
benefit
 to their
bodies
 and the environment.
This
 essay will discuss
this
 statement and put forward my personal perspectives.
To begin
 with, I firmly agree that a
meat
-free diet will undoubtedly reduce the cases of animal abuse. Obviously,
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 animal products' demand leads to less killing. According to my
knowleage
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knowledge
, the largest cluster of
meat
 factories and companies are greedy and profit-driven. These corporations keep
demostic
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domestic
livestocks
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livestock
 in a dense and dirty environment in order to
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 the expense.
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 amount of medication intoxicates animals and customers' health. For all these reasons, consuming more vegetables
instead
 of
meat
 significantly helps to save our planet in many
apsects
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aspects
.
On the other hand
, there is a widely disputed concern that eating only fruits and vegetables may not be an ideal way of a wholesome diet. Human
bodies
 are a complex factory that requires a considerable variety of elements to function properly
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. Having meals with no fish or
meat
 as a long-term lifestyle could have a risk of illness because our
bodies
 were not decided in
this
 way. In conclusion, I am convinced that there is substantial evidence to support that eating no animal product will definitely benefit the environment by reducing the chance of animal abuse.
However
, it may not be the best lifestyle
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 everyone owing to the fact
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our
bodies
 require a range of nutrition that normally can be found in
meat
 and fish to remain healthy.
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