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Some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case.? What is more important thing to succeed in life?

#people #school #life #case
Being successful in
life
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individuals
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every
 failure is the kick start to success.There are many
peope
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people
 failed in their academics and become
they
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the best entrepreneurs in
thier
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their
 real
life
.In my point of
view
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 practical
knowledge
 is more important than theories.
This
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life
. As I mentioned,some
people
 are not aware of their studies
especially
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in
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 their younger ages.it may be because of many reasons.It may be due to poverty,less attention from the parents or teachers
also
 some kids are likes to play with peer groups more than studies.All these may cause will affect their academic scores.
Although
,
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they would be less
attendive
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attentive
 in their schools,after they grew up they will be more focused
in
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thier
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their
 real
life
.Especially in
thier
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their
 own business
ore
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or
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work place
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workplace
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.
For instance
,there
are
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number
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a number
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 of
people
become
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who become
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famouse
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famous
 business magnets without holding
a secondary certificates
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a secondary certificate
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.
This
 is
happpening
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happening
 with
hardwork
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hard work
 and the blessings from
almighty
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.
Hardwork
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Hard work
 is the main tip to easy access
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success,nothing is simple in
life
.Some of them may get
high
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a high
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 score in their academic subjects,
however
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 when they come to the reality of
life
 these
people
 do not know how to apply their theoretical
knowledge
 to
practically
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practice
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both in work and
personel
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personal
life
.
People
 should gain
the
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knowledge
 from the experience.Practice makes the person perfect.The
people
 are getting
knowledge
 from the mistakes.
Definitely
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people
 should go through the mistakes,
then
 only they can achieve the height of success. To conclude,in my perspective
people
 should interact
each
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 other
also
 they have to aware of what is going on around them.Never focus only on academics,whatever studied in the books they should try in
the
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life
.In the
first
trial
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 it will be a failure but should never give up
for
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 anything or for anyone.
People
 should keep on trying
untill
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until
 they achieve.
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