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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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In recent years,
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crime
 has become a big issue
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 the general public. Some
people
 believe that the
people
 who
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 less harmful
crime
 have to send in aa prison. While others
also
 argue that only punish by
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them
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have to do some job support social community service. In my opinion, I partly agree no need to take them
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 a prison. Discussed below are several reasons in
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 of my perspective.
First
 and foremost,
people
 should recognize that light
crimers
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crimes
, drink driving or smoking in a
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 to they no notice or only be
first
 time be sentenced. Should give them a chance to regret yourself and repair
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 be a better person in the future. Another point, I would like to mention that only give them to do
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 support for
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,
also
 the best ways to them can remember and no crimes again.
On the other hand
, there are several arguments against the statement that should send them in a prison to make a standard for other will no dare to
crime
 whether light or diverse crimes. In fact,
people
 have
this
 opinion because we want to social become to better, no
crime
then
also
 should punish them extremely so that.
This
 mean that we would have a lecturer social, everyone
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 to control themselves to live better and always obey right politics. In conclusion, the
above mentioned
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 facts have
creacted
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created
 a dilemma when
people
 evaluate the impact of
this
 issue, and it is still a controversial issue. As far as I am concerned it could have both positive and negative impact.
People
 should have
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this
 problem.
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