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The number of TV programs is growing day by day. Some people say that it is good as it gives people more choices, while others say it affects the quality of TV programs. Discuss both and give your opinion.

#tv #programs #people #choices #quality
Nowadays, Television is the most common source of entertainment. It is believed by some people that incline in media programs are good as exploring more options, whereas,
on the other hand
, critics said that
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 nature of programs
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 vanished. Both perspectives will be explored and
then
 I will concur with the former view. To commence with,
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 of serials has many benefits for
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humankind. The
first
 and foremost benefit is that it seems to have more options. There are numerous tv serials like
daily
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 soap, singing or dancing competitions, reality shows etc. These channels aid the person who
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 any kind of immaculate talent, to explore it and,
also
 to socialize it. One clear example, in a dancing competition, candidates get an opportunity to
show
 their dancing skills,
consequently
, get success. Another benefit is more employment opportunities,
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number
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 of programs increases, manpower to accomplish them
also
 inclines,
hence
 more jobs are there.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks of
this
 surge: boredom and lack of interest.
Firstly
, it is undeniable that repetitive usage has a
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 effect, usage of copied content from traditional series, not only
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to
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 trivial but
also
 become
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monotonous for the spectators.
Furthermore
, if
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 kind of stories included in
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, it cannot be fascinated.
Secondly
, enormous production leads to
lack
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 of excitement, many choices rather than
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 to a particular series.
For example
, Indian Idol,
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 reality
show
, has been continuing
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 10 years,
therefore
, some viewers
show
 less attention to
this
 kind of shows, because of
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 of that
show
. Summing up,
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 growth of media shows and,
also
 suggested my personal viewpoint that it would likely to imperatively good for the people, as it might help in improving economically and devising innovations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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